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Astrid's avatar

**Sub-par pole dancer**

I move in towards the pain,

The metal pushing hard against the bruise,

I put my hand around the pole again.

My feet so close to lifting off the grain

My wet palms slip the grip I always lose,

I move in towards the pain.

Knees bang the floor cause I’ve got shaky aim,

And I can’t manage cues;

I put my hand around the pole again

The music comes again to the refrain,

I get another bruise.

I move in towards the pain.

And yet another skill that I can’t gain,

And yet another disappointed move,

I put my hand around the pole again.

At least I’d like to say I’m glad I came

And make an effort even if I lose.

I put my hand around the pole again,

I move in towards the pain.

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Jillian Joy's avatar

WOW, love this, Astrid! :) Beautiful! So well written and I love seeing so much of you in this ;) I especially love the way the last two lines really shift the tone into something just a bit brighter after a more somber and heavy experience for the author until that point.

Also, that's a villanelle! :D (I just learned about those in more detail yesterday hehe). I may (may) try to write one before these 21 days are up. Let's see! Thank you :)

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Astrid's avatar

Thank you so so much! You get me ;) ALSO villanelles have got to be my FAVOURITE poetic form! There's something about those repeated lines that just speaks to me. Sylvia Plath's poem "Mad Girl's Love Song" is an especially fantastic one imo. Hoping to see some more villanelle representation out there :D :D

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Julie Schmidt's avatar

I feel you in the poem. "Move in towards the pain." I felt this physically, emotionally and mentally - the many levels that pain touches us. Described so wonderfully in trying to learn pole dancing. Truly, this can be applied to so many other areas of life when we step into something new or reach a new level.

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Astrid's avatar

Thank you!! Agreed -- there are so many areas of life in which facing something painful is the only way to progress, and it's the fear of those painful feelings that causes the real suffering. Good luck in your experiences <3

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Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

This is remarkable, Astrid. Powerful and evocative. Your return to the phrase "I move in towards the pain" works verty effectively and nicely. Thank you for sharing this splendid poem!

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A. Wilder Westgate's avatar

This picture of pain and effort reminds me of how I sometimes feel during yoga, but I love the empowering context of pole dancing.

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Julie Schmidt's avatar

Nature is an ongoing dance,

an invitation as pure freedom,

to move as She does.

Non performative

connected

spontaneous

in the moment swaying with life.

Her cycling rhythms,

circling

spiraling

as gyrating hips around and around.

Her beating heart,

pulsating

reverberating

rising and falling

as feet tapping rhythms upon her ground.

Her modulating music of many sounds,

harmonizing

ebbing

flowing

as graceful arms receiving and giving.

Her gift is embodied movement.

Immanence as full presence.

Kinesthetic

tactile

intimate.

Joy in just being…

…the dance as the body.

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Jillian Joy's avatar

Really beautiful, Julie! I'm grateful for the way you've grounded dance into the earth - so well needed, and certainly rejoiced over here! :D My dance on this day felt really tight, pressured, expected, and I just love the flavor of the release you offer in these words.

"Immanence as full presence" and "...the dance as the body" YES. Thank you :)

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Julie Schmidt's avatar

Thanks Jillian. Yes, the dance of life dancing as us!

And I loved your poem. It was so fun and joyful, what dancing needs to be about! The cadence through out it was a dance in of its self.

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Jillian Joy's avatar

I love this notion that life dances through us :) and thank you, Julie!

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Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

This is spectacular, Julie. The poem dances off the page.screen, and my body moves with each line. You capture the rhythm, flow and dance of nature beautifully. THis middle segment:

Her cycling rhythms,

circling

spiraling

as gyrating hips around and around.

Her beating heart,

pulsating

reverberating

rising and falling

as feet tapping rhythms upon her ground."

Oh my gosh, that is pure beauty. What a delightful poem you have crafted and shared!

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Julie Schmidt's avatar

Thanks Larry, I so appreciate what you have shared with me here. I felt this poem as I wrote it, and I love when others share that they are feeling it too. That warms my heart. Again thanks!

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Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

You are wecome, Julie!

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A. Wilder Westgate's avatar

"Her gift is embodied movement." SO beautiful, Julie!

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Julie Schmidt's avatar

Thanks A. for bringing that line forward. For it is such a precious and sacred gift.

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Rhiannon Lynn's avatar

Beautiful Invitation!

"an invitation as pure freedom,

to move as She does.

Non performative

connected

spontaneous"

This part touched my deep rebellion from containment in my dancing. Dance is one of my most powerful nutrients, helping me to FEEL and MOVE energy through my body. Often intensely emotional in all directions. Your words about Pure Freedom feel so incredibly fitting. The spontaneity of moving with what is present. Love your words!!

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Julie Schmidt's avatar

Thanks Rhiannon! It is a powerful nutrient for me too! Most mornings it is how I start my day. Sacred tuning in to my body. I dance/move in and to what is being felt in the moment. And Yes, to being intensely emotional! Movement gets the the feelings flowing, unstuck or stagnant..

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Chuck's avatar

i think its too much pressure.

the rules, the expectations, the push-pull, the condemning eyes, the disappointed partner.

Yes, I suck.

It is home alone,

with no pressure, no rules in sight,

where i truly shine brightest

as the hands down most bad-assy-ist

lord of all things dance.

Pants optional.

rock on.

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Jillian Joy's avatar

Way to keep it real, Chuck! :)

Rock on, pants forever optional ;)

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Steven Barbery's avatar

Rock on. Pants optional. 🤣

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Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

Nice work Chuck. In one of his stores, Jim Harrison has a character that is triyg to get his bearings who takes to dancing alone in the evenings, and it becomes a redemptive act in his restoration. I can't remember the title at the moment, but I will!

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Chuck's avatar

David in his "priestly garment" flashed in my head. Gotta go google jim harrison

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Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

I think you may like his work, especially the fiction, Legends of the Fall is a novella that was turned into a movie some time ago.

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Steven Barbery's avatar

dance

does the music precede the dance

or does the dance call to the music?

let's proceed to the dance floor

to discover the rhythm.

before there was anything

there was nothing

and the spiritual realm

was "dancing in the dark"

all by themselves and

the a voice

from YHWH or the universe

said "I wanna dance with somebody"

which brought about

vibration and music

to create the

eternal "celebration"

dance party

that has been

occurring for

billions of years

the "dancing queen"

bringing for

creative life

that evolves from

"twisting the night away"

to bring us to

this time and

this place as

poets share the

language and

experience of

the dance

with views of

"flashdance...what a feeling"

or "dancing on the ceiling"

while others are doing

sharing about the

"boot scootin boogie"

or talking about

"get jiggy with it"

even if we do

"the safety dance"

some of us

insist that you

"wake me up before you go-go"

because we have personally

experienced

that part of our being

that carries the beat

in our hearts that

keeps us

"staying alive"

which is the correct

cadence for cpr compressions

coincidence?

I hardly think so

our souls pull us

toward partners

that we can share

"the dance" with

even as friends

creation will join in

knowing we "can't stop the feeling"

because "life's a dance"

if I have to I will be

"dancing with myself"

but it is better

as a dance party

so would you please

"shut up and dance"

with me and creation

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Jillian Joy's avatar

WOW. Steven. This is incredible!! (And you're already so in tune with other things I have planned a bit later ;D). SO FUN. Really, I'm smiling from ear to ear over here. That you even had the brilliance to incorporate the references as you did, much less off such a smashing message throughout your whole is AWESOME :) (I really love this one.)

And this question - "does the dance call to the music?" Oh, such a nice contemplation. Thank you :)

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Steven Barbery's avatar

Thank you so much. Your poem inspired me. Also dance is a favorite thing to do.

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Rhiannon Lynn's avatar

I LOVE THIS! Smiles and laughter and a longing for a playlist! I really FEEL your question at the beginning, "does the dance call to the music?" .... In so many ways I feel my dance calling to music, calling to harmony every day!

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Steven Barbery's avatar

Thank you and keep dancing

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Julie Schmidt's avatar

How fun Steven! Love all the song references and thanks for leaving the details about it in the reply. I did not see the reply till finishing your poem, so it was fun to feel into the song and remember when I heard it and who sings it as I was reading your poem.

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Steven Barbery's avatar

Thank you. I am still thinking of songs. Lol

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Steven Barbery's avatar

"Dancing in the Dark" Bruce Springsteen

"I Wanna Dance with Somebody" Whitney Houston

"Celebration" Kool and the Gang

"Dancing Queen" ABBA

"Twisting the Night Away" Sam Cooke

"Flashdance...What a Feeling" Irene Cara

"Dancing on the Ceiling" Lionel Ritchie

"Boot Scooting Boogie" Brooks and Dunne

"Gettin Jiggy with It" Will Smith

"The Safety Dance" Men Without Hats

"Wake Me Up Before You Go-Go" Wham

"Staying Alive" Bee Gees

"The Dance" Garth Brooks

"Can't Stop the Feeling" Justin Timberlake

"Life's a Dance" John Michael Montgomery

"Dancing with Myself" Billy Idol

"Shut Up and Dance " Walk the Moon

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Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

This is wonderfully creative, Steven. I love the weaving of theology with the lyrics to great dance songs and the questions and wonders you raise. This is so well done. Reading through it a few times, I found myself thinking how we could incorporate this beautiful lifting up of dance and music and joy on Sunday or Saturday mornings, having folks share the dance tunes of their memory, developing a dancing community that sopeaks with our bodies much like the whirling dervishes of the Sufi tradfition and other ectstatic practices. Enough said, now I'll just shut up and dance!

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Jillian Joy's avatar

Wow, such beautiful thoughts here, Larry! :) I would personally also love to see more dance in official religious activities. Love that you bring in the Sufi dervishes - that truly is an incredible and ecstatic practice :)

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Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

They are truly amazing and hearing a different plane and dimension.

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Steven Barbery's avatar

In seminary I took a liturgical dance class. For my final project, I did a dance to the creation story in Genesis as the scripture and Louis Armstrong's "What a Wonderful World". As the only dancer I was h'adam exploring the world through dance

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Steven Barbery's avatar

Thank you so much. I think of the song, Lord of the Dance as a wonderful song recalling a deeper meaning of dance.

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Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

Yes! That definitely is a favorite and one we sing from time to time!

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A. Wilder Westgate's avatar

A bunch of songs with "dance" in the title came to mind while I was getting started today, too! This is so fun.

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Jillian Joy's avatar

Lovely! If you'd like to share links, or even just list titles, I'm actually feeling like maybe I'll try putting together a quick collective "Dance" playlist so we can have something fun to listen and return to. I might post a separate comment to keep it organized :)

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A. Wilder Westgate's avatar

Sure! A few I thought of were "Dance with me Tonight" by Olly Murs, "I Hope you Dance" by LeeAnn Womack, "Dance Magic Dance" by David Bowie, and "Save the Last Dance" by Michael Bublé.

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Steven Barbery's avatar

Good suggestions. That brought to mind a duet by Jane Monheit and Michael Bublé to "I won't dance, don't ask me" that is a dance in itself.

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Chuck's avatar

THE SAFETY DANCE 🙂🙂🙂YES

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Steven Barbery's avatar

You can dance of you want to. You can leave your friends behind because your friends don't dance

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A. Wilder Westgate's avatar

I want to dance

to the rhythm

of the universe

.

like

.

leaves

on the breeze

stars

across the sky

waves

on the shore

smiles

on your lips

fingers

along your skin

words

on the page

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Jillian Joy's avatar

Was part of your inspiration here "Rhythm of the Night"? Your first three lines kept provoking me and the song was in the back of my mind ;)

This is so lovely. Like a melodic perfect wave. I love the place it leaves me, feeling just a little windswept but so happy :) Thank you for another treasure, you're REMARKABLE.

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A. Wilder Westgate's avatar

It wasn't, but I love that it reminded you of something happy!

And thank you! It means so much to know that my writing is capable of evoking those feelings in you.

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Rhiannon Lynn's avatar

Your beautiful poem felt like a kaleidoscope of images that opened my body INTO rhythm. Gentle and powerful communion with the dance of life! Wonderful!

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A. Wilder Westgate's avatar

This compliment means so much, thank you!

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Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

This is just wonderful, A. What a beautiful flow the poem has. I read it several times in a row quickly, and my heart pounded and a big smile broke out and I put on some music! Your poems move me, figuratively and literally! Thank you lifting me up today!

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A. Wilder Westgate's avatar

I love that, Larry! I'm familiar with that kind of physical reaction to a poem and I'm so happy that my words can evoke such a feeling for you.

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Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

Yes--and they conistently do!

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Julie Schmidt's avatar

Gorgeous. I felt the dance all the way through and all I can say is, Me Too, I want to dance that way!

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A. Wilder Westgate's avatar

Your poem today is so playful, Jillian! I am loving the word choices. Today's took me a bit, but I'm happy I gave it the time.

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Jillian Joy's avatar

Thank you so much, A.! I'm so glad you could love it. Truth be told, this one took me a LONG time to write haha, and there was such tension throughout the experience that, even now that it's published, I'm STILL not sure I'm completely at peace with it.

I think part of the beauty here IS precisely the space and time to take as long as you need <3 I'm glad you gave it time too.

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Jillian Joy's avatar

Especially since this word moved through us all in such a joyous and celebratory way, I invite you all to participate in creating a collective Day 2 - Dance playlist! You can either share Spotify song links or write the song titles/artists (especially if covers) in the comments of this thread, and then I'll turn that into our own group playlist :)

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Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

This is a great word! I sat down to write a short poem, but I read your all's poems, and just could not stop dancing!

Dance

Evening on a hot summer day,

sun leaves the stage as the moon and stars

enter stage right.

I can hear music.

the evening sky rising like a symphony,

ready for the whole orchestra to join.

I sit on the back porch waiting,

your return expected but never demanded,

knowing my words and flowers and dinner

don’t quite express what I feel.

The dance of our love moves beyond

any meager definitions and labels.

You pull into the drive from the dusty road,

Your weariness clear as you open the door.

I say “welcome home.”

And, “let’s dance.”

Holding open arms like safe haven,

we don’t need music to dance.

And we dance.

Bodies flowing like waves at sunset,

rolling and rocking and howling to the moon,

your agile movements tolerating the times

my feet just don’t match.

Our love is full of changing seasons and shifting tides.

Sometimes we dance like dervishes,

spinning and gliding above the ground.

Others we move slowly,

heart to heart, flesh to flesh,

needing no music to lead us,

our love shining the way.

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Jillian Joy's avatar

Wow, Larry, what a gorgeous poem! Your love here is apparent, and indeed, as A. said, to be held by you in any capacity is a gift! So beautiful :)

I especially love:

"the evening sky rising like a symphony,

ready for the whole orchestra to join."

And also:

"Sometimes we dance like dervishes,

spinning and gliding above the ground.

Others we move slowly,

heart to heart, flesh to flesh,

needing no music to lead us,

our love shining the way."

I really love the way that, several times, you reference being able to dance without music. YES, for all the levels on which this speaks <3 Big love, thank you!

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Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

Thank you Jillian for such nice and affirming words. I did intend to write a short poem but was led another way. Thank you for the wonderful word today! And we dance, and we dance!

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Jillian Joy's avatar

Haha, sometimes our short poems just aren’t so short ;)

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A. Wilder Westgate's avatar

In all of your words, your love just comes pouring through, Larry. Steady and safe and so full of tenderness. To be held by you in any capacity is a gift.

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Jillian Joy's avatar

So well said, A., and I absolutely agree! <3

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Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

Thank you A. That is an amazingly kind and generous thing to say. I hold your words in my heart. I appreciate your kind and compassionate spirit!

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Julie Schmidt's avatar

Oh my, so much sweetness here! Acceptance, love, connection. Just Beautiful!

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Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

Thank you Julie!

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Rhiannon Lynn's avatar

Larry, you are magical. Swoon.

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Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

Hah! Thank you!

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Deborah Brasket's avatar

That was a fun poem and I also enjoyed the Wild woman Israeli song. An energetic way to start my day.

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Jillian Joy's avatar

Thank you so much, Deborah! And I'm glad you could listen to that set :) Miss Albi is one of my favorite up and coming ecstatic DJs in Israel, and this set is definitely energizing ;)

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Julie Schmidt's avatar

Jillian, what a fun poem! It was a dance unto itself!

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Jillian Joy's avatar

Thank you so much, Julie! I'm so glad you could enjoy it :)

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Larry Brickner-Wood's avatar

This is a gem Jillian! I'm dancing! This is a song, with or without music. I love the energy, playfulness, joy, love and acceptance in each line. May you keep on dancing!

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Jillian Joy's avatar

Thank you so much, Larry! I really appreciate that, and love that you feel the music within it :) The roaring twenties came floating through a bit for me while writing, and that was fun. May your dance carry you onwards delighted as well :)

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Steven Barbery's avatar

I can't think of a better word for Friday. I love everything about your poem. Again, I am inspired. Thank you

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Jillian Joy's avatar

I actually hadn't thought that much about the timing, but you're so right! Perfect time to dance ;) Thank you so much, Steven :)

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Nina's avatar

Dance dance

Now is your chance

I feel the rhythm

I feel the beat

I can’t stop moving my feet

And I am unstoppable

I’m on fire

Full of desire

Any movement goes

As long as it’s on beat

Boom boom goes the bass

Making up new moves as I go

Sometimes I move fast

Other times I move slow

And I’m not ready

The beat is steady

Now is my time to move

I feel the groove

Got 500 people to dance

I started by myself

Then 2 more followed,

And finally the rest joined in

I love to dance

Dance the pain away

I dance every single day

And when I stomp

I feel so grounded

And when I jump

I jump for joy

When I shake

I feel so relaxed after

I can dance at any time

Mostly at home

When noone's watching

I get in my zone

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